#125 Gratitude

by SzélsőFa

That hint of scorn behind those angel eyes.
Uhm, yes Your Honor? The first time I met the victim?

An afternoon in late August.

In the town park.

The park was sort of crowded and of all the colors of the leaves I preferred tan—

Uhm, sorry.
He came by and asked if there was seat beside me.

That calm voice.
Young and flexible body.

Uhm, in due order?
Sure I understand that.
We began seeing each other.

In my home.

His idea? No Your Honor, I invited him.

For about five months.

Quite intimate.

I am over 50, you see, Your Honor. It felt like a bliss. Like a summer’s last scented bloom before winter sets in. There was no way to resist the calling.

All quiet, sir. No arguments. Not at all.

No, no written contracts of any kind.

Uhm, yes, occasionally.

Like when he needed a new leather jacket, and I paid his karate classes.

By overhearing a conversation.

Right the day before he, before I . . .

It was an unusually cold day. He chopped wood for the fireplace and he had a shower and we were about to, uhm, have a dinner in the hall.

I took a shower, too.

Chatted on his mobile with a friend.

A male voice.

No, never before.

Scorn. Pity. Even disgust.

Mocking at me with that person. Yes, laughing at me.

With all my support and compassion I sure did not deserve. He should have shown some . . . some gratitude?


Flutterby said...

The most interesting thing about this story is how you can get the whole thing while you only jot down half the conversation.

SzélsőFa said...

thank you Flutterby - I too, thought of focussing on the lady alone. I enjoyed writing it, I hope you liked reading it, too.

Unknown said...

Love the one-sided dialogue! And the fascinating character.

SzélsőFa said...

thank you Amara Royce - I'm glad the dialogue worked for you.

Anonymous said...

Love it. Well done indeed. I love this line the most:
"Like a summer’s last scented bloom before winter sets in. There was no way to resist the calling."


Sarah Laurenson said...

Love filling in the conversational gaps. I can almost hear what the judge has to say. Well done.

SzélsőFa said...

thank you Paul,
I think that particular line might play an essential role in understanding the lady.

thank you Sarah Laurenson for playing along with me :)

Catherine Vibert said...

Interesting way of telling a story, I like it, it's fresh.

SzélsőFa said...


thank you for your kind words of appreciation.